On the old forums I made a post about this, but since they no longer exist, I’ll write something again.
The final chapter of The Soldiers of Halla has been talked about and discussed quite a bit. Some love it. Others hate it. Some understand it fully. Others don’t get it. I’m not going to explain it all here because I’d prefer that readers draw their own conclusions. But I will make a few comments. First off, I don’t consider the ending to be a cliff hanger. Not even close. The story is very clear about what is going to happen next, and that is that Bobby will soon go to Solara and Courtney will not be far behind. To understand how the events described in the last chapter could have happened, you have to look at the end of the second to last chapter. Bobby lamented to Uncle Press that after all they had been through, it seemed unfair that the Travelers were not being allowed to live the normal lives they fought so hard for. All they wanted was a little bit of time to live those lives, which in the general scheme of Halla, wasn’t much . . . and Uncle Press agreed with him. How that was able to happen, and what all the implications are, I’ll leave that up to you to debate and decide.
I’ll say one other thing, and that’s about the guy who delivered Bobby’s journals to him in the hospital. Short of actually writing his name, I pretty much described exactly who it was. From the events that unfolded in the hospital room with Bobby and Courtney kissing and being interrupted, to his physical description, to Bobby recognizing him, to him saying that he had nine other journals to deliver, there is no other possible person that could have been…but Uncle Press.
bri (bree) says:
IS ANYONE THERE???!!! OR ARE YOU ALL IN NEW YORK OR SOMEWHERE!!???
Shadow Jumper says:
Ok, Kelvin, I hope this will help. I only read up to your post so I don’t know if someone posted this but this is what I get from how D.J. Described it. Before they died, or returned to their spiritual selves, Uncle Press told them that they had lived many many lives and that when they became part of Solara again, all of their other lives would mesh with theirs. Bobby growing up to be really old with his wife Courtney and Mark dying were all part of another life. It was part of a life where the flumes were never there, Saint Dane was never there. Possibly both lives were happening at the same time or at different times. Kind of like on each territory differr
Shadow Jumper says:
Ok, Kelvin, I hope this will help. I only read up to your post so I don’t know if someone posted this but this is what I get from how D.J. Described it. Before they died, or returned to their spiritual selves, Uncle Press told them that they had lived many many lives and that when they became part of Solara again, all of their other lives would mesh with theirs. Bobby growing up to be really old with his wife Courtney and Mark dying were all part of another life. It was part of a life where the flumes were never there, Saint Dane was never there. Possibly both lives were happening at the same time or at different times. Kind of like on each territory differrent travelers had different lives.
Shadow Jumper says:
Sorry accidentally hit submit too early.
bri (bree) says:
um… this isnt Kelvin, its Bri. And i still need some advice on what to do with my story and i know its pretty late wherever you are but PLEASE PLEASE!!! HELP ME AND GIVE ME SOME ADVICE AND TO SPECIFICALLY SEE WHAT IM WORRIED ABOUT AND NEED ADVICE ON GO TO THE OLDER COMMENTS!!!
bri (bree) says:
i dont know how to spell specifically(?).
Shadow Jumper says:
Ok bri for starters it’s 4:53 pm at my house so your fine. My posts earlier were for Kelvin because he asked a question and i answered it. I’m gonna go read the posts you did and I’ll see how I can help.
Shadow Jumper says:
Ok I just read about what you posted. The scene you were talking about was really confusing without any background. How many pages is it? Because if it’s not like more than thirty or something I’d like to read it and then give you advice.
bri (bree) says:
um.. its a lot more than 30 pages.
bri (bree) says:
here’s a sum up.
end of Ch. 6
one of the main characters, Moon, has just fallen through a trap door that another main character, Sun, had accidently sprung. Moon tumbles through the darkness till she finds herself in a hole then a person comes and takes her to the enemy. Ch. 7.
he starts talking and threating her. up on the surface Sun and another main character, Carrot, aren’t to sure on what to do and Carrot is mad at Sun because she sprung the trap that made Moon disappear. then a figure comes up and apparently is Sun’s mother and she has some advice for her but i’m not sure exactly what that advice is going to be.
bri (bree) says:
as for the rest of the story here’s a summary i just made up.
Moon is a Moonlit Princess, but see doesn’t know that at the very beginning.
” ‘ There is a great evil coming, Moon. One that the ancient people of this land bound, so they hoped, forever in an endless abyss.’ ” -Sun The Prophecy. A great evil is stirring and it’s up to Moon, Sun and Carrot to stop it. It’s called the Darkness. They must travel to the eastern part of the land to stop it and along the way they meet unforgettable characters and confront danger at almost every turn. Will they be brave enough to stop it or will they turn down the offer to go on this quest and leave it to someone else to take care of it?
Not to good of a summary but it’s all i could think of. If you want i can type up the prologue and post it if you want me to.
Shadow Jumper says:
It really all depends on what type of book it is. Like is it fantasy, does anyone have powers? The advice all depends on the mother and daughter’s relationship. I really can’t give to much advice without knowing more. How bout this, look at how many pages there are and then I’ll get back to ya.
bri (bree) says:
anyone there?
Shadow Jumper says:
I typed up my post before I read that. Ya can you post the Prologue.
bri (bree) says:
HELLO??????????????!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
bri (bree) says:
hold on!
bri (bree) says:
yes, Moon cannot feel pain unless an ancient secret is brought down on her and if she gets hurt if it’s like an arrow or something, once she pulls it out it heals instantly and her and Sun can speak a different language and they both can talk to plants and animals. Sun’s mother is called the Sun Queen and its hold on i have to wait for the computer to load. the other computer
bri (bree) says:
its 35 pages
bri (bree) says:
it is 35 pages so far
Shadow Jumper says:
See if you can post it here and if you can’t just use email
bri (bree) says:
note the so far
bri (bree) says:
actually its probably 37 considering the pages i haven’t typed yet
bri (bree) says:
well im a bit uncomfortable posting or sending it all or even one page but i guess i can give a sum up about the prolouge
bri (bree) says:
is that ok??
bri (bree) says:
hello??
bri (bree) says:
ive got a question for you. what do you mean by Shadow Jumper does it involve Pendragon or is it just a name?
pendragon says:
changed my name still the same person
pendragon says:
well since you’re not answering here’s a sum up about the prolouge.
in a land far, far away there was a beautiful princess. she wasn’t actually a princess though, everyone just called her that because of her beauty and how she loved every creature in the land. (Talks about the land) The princess had a more formal name, The Moonlit Princess. She was called that because of her light blonde hair decorated with silver highlights and because of her robe which was a brilliant silver at night but turned a dull gray in the day. This robe could change shape and offered the Princess many disguises. her hair was pulled back by a band that shattered in anyone else’s touch but her’s and when it was in her hair it was very strong. She had one permanite home which was a hollow. but she mostly slept in the hills with the chimpmunks and rabbits. today she could smell the honeysuckly growing wild in the hills and she was reminded of a distant memory she couldn’t recall.
It’s not word for word but it’s close enough, so… yeah. there you go.
pendragon says:
how do you spell permanite?
pendragon says:
HELLO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!?????????????????????
pendragon says:
i meant honeysuckle
pendragon says:
i’m kind of impatient. so…… could you hurry up please?
pendragon says:
la, la, la, la, la, la, laaaa.
pendragon says:
i’m going now. i’ll check back later tonight or on Monday.
Shadow Jumper says:
Sorry I was eating dinner. A few things, one about my name, it’s the title given to the main character in a story I started writing. Um the story sounds interesting but I’d have to have more to give any advice on any advice the mom could give. I don’t know why you wouldn’t want to post any of it, that’s actually what they did on the old Pendragon site. Speaking of which, D.J. if you read this, will we be able to do Rp forums and Short Stories like we did on the other one.
bri (bree) says:
um well i just don’t. i still feel umcomfortable because i don’t want people to claim it was their idea and ruin my whole story if i ever get it finished. and i don’t want to email it because, i know this will sound odd, well… i’m kind of technology (as in computers and cell phones, etc.) challenged. also i don’t know exactly who you are but some more info for you to see if you come up with any more advice on what advice the mother could give is:
the darkness had regained his whole strength and plans to surface soon and start a battle and his hunters/stalkers are on their tail and the Sun Queen is really wise. she told what Sun should say to Moon to persuade her to go on the quest, cause at first she was against the idea, and so i want her to give wise advice that is kind of like a riddle that they have to figure out and kind of simple too. so yeah.
bri (bree) says:
be back Monday probably around 4 or sometime then maybe three. when you come back read what i just said. your time will probably be around 5,6, or 7 so check around that time thanks bye
bri (bree) says:
be back MONDAY!!! can’t come on here tomorrow because parents won’t let me.
Darkness says:
still Bri, just changed my name, kind of did what you did.do you know how to say Halla and Solara? cause i don’t know how and considering my luck however i’m saying it is wrong and i know about the prononciation(that how you spell it?) guide and it doesn’t mention Halla or Solara so please, PLEASE help me and i think its cool you’re writing a story too makes me feel like i’m not the only young author in the world which i know i’m not. but it’s good to know that some people won’t think i’m crazy for writing a story. and what’s YOUR story about any way? it sounds kind of interesting. Unlike MINE. and don’t try to encourage me. i know it sounds stupid. i could tell you thought so by saying ‘um’ at the begining of your sentence that said what you thougt of it. and ‘um’ usually means ‘wow! that’s really stupid!’ i’m not dumb
Shadow Jumper says:
I’m kind of spit balling here but she could say something about Sun being part of the prophecy, like this: “Dear dear Sun, I fell there is part of the prophecy you should hear,” her mother said as she rested her hands on her daughters shoulder. “With the help of her polar opposite, the one who lights up the night, shall stop the Darkness that tries to engulf the light.”
It’s basically saying that the prophecy says that with the help of Sun, Moon will be able to stop the Darkness. I don’t know that’s what I thought of.
Shadow Jumper says:
Wait Darkness did you post the idea for your story earlier cause if you did I’m gonna go read it. Don’t say you think it’s dumb every story has potential. And if you don’t like that one then use what you learn from it in your next one, but definitely don’t give up. On the subject of young writers, you’re not alone. (who’s a young writer and has two thumbs, this guy!). (I know corny, don’t care.)
Shadow Jumper says:
Wait forgot my last post. *smacks head* your still bri. The reason I said um, was because I was trying to think of what to say based on what you told me. Sorry about the mix up.
My story is about a boy that figures out, through meditation, how to separate his spiritual self from his physical self. While he’s out of his body (which he looks sweet cause he’s purpleish-black although he can’t be seen by humans.) this demonic figure in a red robe tells calls him the Shadow Jumper, and tells him if he jumps again it will be his last move. He’s called shadow jumper because he travels jumping from shadow to shadow and controls shadows.
Darkness says:
that sounds really cool. well, i don’t know if your idea will work because i’ve already got a prophecy and for Sun she will play some part in stopping him. Moon will discover the true extent of her powers(which i don’t know yet). and she will discover more of her past. Carrot’s (rabbit) part in the prophecy is that he will save the day when the Darkness is at it’s worst. Sun will help me the most and Moon the least. so Moon- leader of the group, less part. Sun- second in command, little bit more than Moon. Carrot- only included because he will play the biggest part. and if you suggest that Sun’s mother didn’t tell her all the prophecy i can’t really see that in my story either.
Darkness says:
i meant Sun will help Carrot the most not me
Darkness says:
HELP HELP HELP!!!!!!!! HELP HELP HELP!!!! PLEASE HELP ME!!!
Shadow Jumper says:
Do you get what I meant about it being hard for me to guess without knowing the story 🙂
You know she could say something like, “Nothing is hidden from prophecy. All though you spring that trap, prophecy will still continue as predicted. You will still defeat the darkness.” Does that seem better?
Shadow Jumper says:
Meant sprung not spring
Darkness says:
yes i understand that it’s hard for you to do that and i apprecitate that you are trying to help me. i think your idea is a good one to but maybe you could help me merge that with a bit of mystery in it. like a riddle but a simple one that sounds confusing and maybe it could include something about the Darkness’s Hunters on their trail
Darkness says:
i can’t believe your parents are letting you stay up this late on the computer. cause considering our two hour differences it must be ten o’clock where you are. i know that it might even be eleven over there. i know that my parents would never let me stay up that late.
Darkness says:
and also you’re forgetting that Carrot is the one that will save the day when things are at its worst. Sun will play a medium part. and Moon will play the smallest part.